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The Girl in the Swing
Just this side of a coulee, on the outskirts of the city,
We find ten year old Helen, in a new tree swing, sitting.
A gift from her grandfather, bought new in a box, dangling
from a prime tree in the pasture, capable host for hanging.
She is timid at first, getting used to the feel of strand,
Squeezing the cord accordingly, in the palm of her hand.
In time she will ascend to heights unsurpassed, in flight,
but for now, she takes in stride, the ride, future bright.
Over the years, she would be found there, floating aloft;
Drifting, dreaming winsome at times, perhaps in deep thought.
On the day she turned eighteen, she became of age, an heir,
At the apex of thrust, seeing civilization, just over there.
She had a plan in motion, had consulted a trusted adviser,
Only this confidante knew her intents, no one else the wiser.
This would be a gamble, a big step to take, to subdivide,
What began on a hunch, the numbers crunched, on this glide.
Her scheme, on the level, as level as the turf they surveyed;
In no time at all, gravel was spread, then black top laid.
Utilities in place; word on the street, lots here for sale;
Initial pricing steep, then descending, on a sliding scale.
Phases One and Two served to settle, recoup her investment;
The third and final were put in a vault, serving as profit.
Within weeks, all the lots for sale were gone, save for one,
The prime lot, the ground her willow tree proudly rested on.
From her perch, over time, she witnessed neighborly things.
The seasonal comings and goings a divided commune brings.
Families milling about, in the warm months, a barbecue glow,
When the winter cast its spell, taking turns shoveling snow.
More and more, inhabitants spoke of the girl, in hushed tone.
Her time to stay varied, as she appeared daily, always alone.
One can only surmise, what all, curious onlookers had to say.
From the looks some cast, they seemed to wish she'd go away.
One day, fate intervened, as fate will do, on the path to walk.
As several neighbors gathered, one approached, needed to talk.
True, he had received a new job option, requiring he relocate.
False, he nodded toward the empty swing, intent to insinuate.
In an effort to keep up with the Jones, he put on a facade.
The others did not take in stride, or see through his fraud.
He made it official the following week, house on the market.
Within weeks, similar signs cluttered yards, like a blanket.
To everyone who played the real estate market, a big surprise,
As each house sold on the initial showings, very first tries.
With offers to assume mortgages "as is," owners sold cheap.
Most got out while the getting was good, took the same leap.
In time, all the houses sold went into rental service mode.
There was only one family unit left to hold onto their abode.
The renters came in a hurry, fine houses in an area perfect,
A full time maintenance firm in place, zero property neglect.
The new dwellers never noticed, (transients are just that way)
The girl in the swing, who was still found there every day.
They never judged or cast aspersion, even on a lark or whim.
She had every right to be where she was. It was fine by them.
None of them knew, she was their landlord, did not presume.
There was nothing about her that gave them cause for gloom.
At first sign of spring, the first barbecue, she was invited.
She respectfully declined, but took note, she was not slighted.
When they left her, she could not resist a turn and smile.
She thought aloud, saying, "I might join them in a while."
She was brought back into the present, by a gentle voice.
A little girl of nine to ten before her, spoke by choice.
She and her mother were the only home owners to not leave.
The mother scolded the child, and was told, no need to grieve.
The youngster spoke boldly, when apparent opportunity arose,
As the girl in the swing gave her the floor, in full repose.
"I was just wondering, if sometime I might sit in your seat."
Hearing this, the mother cringed, wanting to take to the street.
She arose from her throne, with a natural glow on her face,
And hoisted the child, spun and put her secure, in her place.
Speaking in mock admonishing tone, said to hold on tight,
As she got behind, and gave it a push, with all her might.
To the mother, she offered, "Don't feel I've been taken to task.
For so long have I waited... She is the first to ever ask."
Michael Todd (2015)
I used to love the swings when I was a kid. It's such a natural part of childhood. A shame this girl waited so many years to push someone on her swing. Sometimes, people perceive things in a different way than the simple truth.
ReplyDeleteIt is a shame, Lisa, but in my imaginative world, it was well worth the wait. Thanks for visiting. How are things in California?
DeleteOh, and... Nice FRISTING !!!
The weather has been nice, it's like spring here :) The only thing that makes me happier than spring, is summer lol!
DeleteTemperatures in the sixties here today. Tomorrow we have an ice storm forecast, with temps plummeting into single digits... It is like living in Canada, I tell you.
DeleteThat can't be so bad. I hear there are beautiful roses in Canada ;)
DeleteYes... They grow wild, on the plains...
DeleteThis gave a warm chill, if you get my meaning. Only a child could see what another child sees. The ending...perfect!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Dave... It took me weeks to figure out how to tie this story up. I am really glad I waited. The only acceptable ending was right in front of me, all along. I just could not see it. Then, I did.
DeleteWhat a sweet sad story...
ReplyDeleteThis is our world, everyone passing by quickly with
no intention to know their neighbor.
I use to think that was just life in the big city, Deanna, but it seems to have spread to all over. The Welcome Wagon just does not run like it used to.
DeleteBeautifully written! Brings to mind carefree summer days of swinging as a child... Aww who am I kidding, I still love to go on swings! I love the viewpoint and passage of time here. The ending is just brilliant, how wonderful for it to finally come full circle! :D
ReplyDeleteColleen... you just gave me cold chills, the happy kind, with your very kind overview of this piece. I could not hope for more. Thank you.
DeleteThis is the perfect poem! It just warms the heart. :) I think that once a lover-of swings...always a lover-of swings.
ReplyDeleteIrene
Thank you, Irene... Your words warm my heart. :)
DeleteYour story is quite awesome, Myke and the end is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for coming by, and your kind response, Alba Leigh.
DeleteWhat a wonderful work Myke... and yes a poignant and wonderful closing to this piece that holds many layers....
ReplyDeleteThanks bunches, Katherine. The story is tiered, and but closure serves it well, I think. I was fortunate it came to me as it did.
DeleteMakes me think when the time was...the time I lost my simplicity of sharp perception childhood had, and how many years it took to steal some of it back.
ReplyDeleteWell done, Myke :)
-slj
I understand, Stephen... The further I go back, the more clear things become to me. Thanks for visiting, Brother.
DeleteLove it! I have a swing, myself. It's a nice place for peaceful pondering. I have only shared it with my grandkids!
ReplyDeleteSandra... you just made me realize, we do not have a tree swing here...
DeleteNow it is my Spring goal to by one and install it for my family. I have grand kids that would love it, and it is more safe than the trampoline we have looming in the yard. :)
"The Girl in the Swing" is a poem filled with imagery and thought provoking at the same time.
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Thank you so much, Michael. Your overview is humbling, Sir.
DeleteThere's something a bit eerie about this - the lone girl in the swing. For a minute I thought she might be a ghost. I would love to have a big porch with a swing on it. Harkens back to an earlier time, Another fascinating poem, Michael. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteShe is far from a ghost, Debbie. She is real, and she is an image from an artist's rendering, and she is someone else entirely, and most of all, she is my best friend, in every sense of the word.
DeleteThanks so much for taking time to visit. Stay warm up there in True North Country, and hug the puppies for me.
The moral in this is a lesson for all of us when we think of prejudice, of enterprise and loneliness . It portrays each in the most charming presentation..Everyone remembers when they had a swing or still have. The time spent swinging up, up into the air and back again to view the world around us. And we all in some form or another have been slighted. Rejoiced when we saw the slighter be bested. And those feelings of loneliness and wanting to share.
ReplyDeleteThe joy when someone cares and joins you..This was such a wonderful poem Myke
Stormy
You pretty much just took my breath away, with your in depth analysis here, Stormy Gail... I was so hoping to get your thoughts on this, and you did not disappoint. I think you get the story, even more so than the writer. Seriously, you brought out angles I had not actively dwelt on, as I was putting this together... Now, I get to go back and read it from your perspective. I am pretty happy about that, you know. I really am.
DeleteThank you so very much... Myke
I left a nifty comment and as usual it deleted it before it posted, even though I was already signed in. bummer.....in any case this is a great piece on many levels and I wish I could remember what I wrote the first time. Well done Mr Myke
ReplyDeleteI understand, Stephy... This happens to me quite often... But, I am glad to hear from you and that you enjoyed our poem. Thanks bunches for coming by.
DeleteI really enjoyed this Michael including how you closed in the final two lines! This seems so fitting as a screenplay script.
ReplyDeleteDon, if anyone wants to tackle this as a screen play, I will be a more than willing accomplice... Thanks so much for coming by.
DeleteLovely and poignant. Does anything speak so directly to childhood as a swing? Well done and great ending!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Deidre... I believe you are onto something about the swing representing childhood, in its best facets... Glad you stopped by. :)
DeleteAs I read this Big Yellow Taxi was playing in my head by that great lyricist Joni Mitchell..."they paved paradise and put up a parking lot" ain't it the truth, and I so admire that you have discipline to actually write a sonnet, Michael, I lost that discipline so long ago, love ya like a brother!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Chuck... I would rather stay within the confines of a sonnet, but from time to time, I have to break out, into mini-epic mode... Now you have that song stuck in my head! It is okay. I really like Joni Mitchell.
DeleteMichael, what a captivating, bittersweet piece and wonderful poetic story. My eyes were glued and I'm not lying. I could see something of myself in the "original" girl on the swing. I've a feeling her sharing of the swing will be a turning point in her life. You left me wanting more. xo Eliza
ReplyDeleteFantastic, how you could see yourself in this character, Eliza Anne... That just makes me all kinds of happy. Thank you. :)
DeleteBeautiful and amusing as always.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Morgan... Lovely to see you in my house.
DeleteLove this! I think it's every person's desire to have someone else show interest in the thing you love. :)
ReplyDeleteIndeed it is, Joleene. I can definitely relate to this... Thanks for stopping by. :)
DeleteA great narrative poem, Michael. I’ll be sharing this with my writing students this week or next.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Debra... Feel free to share this, as needed, and I appreciate that.
DeleteFantastic write Michael....you pulled it together so well.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Linda Kay... So glad you enjoyed this.
DeleteThis has a Rod Serling quality to it. The little girl symbolizing innocence lost and the neighbors not being able to handle the loss.
ReplyDeleteOh, Christopher, I can so do that Rod Serling voice... I always enjoy your takes on poems and such. Your perspective is fantastic.
DeleteI loved my swing when I was a young girl. Sad that the original neighbors didn't attempt to befriend her. Sometimes we need to take our cues from the young ones. Enjoyed your story Myke :)
ReplyDeleteI never had a swing, Laura. I did not even have access to one. I guess I just missed out. But, if I had to watch someone else ride one daily, I would most likely have become interested, and tried to find a way to give it a test ride.
DeleteThanks for coming over. Nice to see you, as always.
I don't remember a particular swing, just a sense of freedom to muse, to be, to settle within myself. Such a lovely sense of self you gift back to me here. thank you.
ReplyDeleteAnna, I said in a previous reply that I never had a tree swing. I had not thought about that when writing this poem. But, after reading your insightful comment, I was reminded about a porch swing at my grand parents' house. That was my special place.
DeleteWonderful to see you here. :)
Hi Myke...who doesn't like a happy ending? or swings? I stop by but don't usually comment.
ReplyDeleteWe believe in happy endings, for sure, Carol... Very nice to see you here.
DeleteDear Michael,
ReplyDeleteThis poem flows so naturally. Sad that so many people want bigger and better, leaving behind the memories--sometimes a simpler life--to race to the top. I'm grateful for my simple abode, for family and friends. Hope one day the girl does join with her neighbors. Thought-provoking poem.
Karen
Thanks for reading, Karen... Some sad aspects here, but I am going with, everything worked out for the best, at the close of day. I am on a happy tangent. :)
DeleteWhat a great piece, Michael! I like Don MacIver's idea too!
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Thanks, Eric... I find Don't idea quite appealing, too!
DeleteI have pictures of me and my cousins on both of my grandparents' swings. Great memories. You should put all your stories in a book!
ReplyDeleteI bet those pictures are priceless, Wynne. You will have to show them to me soon... As for the book idea, all of a sudden I like that. Let's talk about it.
DeleteWOW mike. Im kinda in awe here. What a terrific story you tell. The swinging girl who is a permanent fixture
ReplyDeletein amongst change all around her,
and I really enjoyed that twist in the end... what a brilliant concept.
The entire world revolves around each of us, at times, Teresa... just not the times we are expecting that to occur... Glad you enjoyed the ending.
DeleteLoved swings so much growing up that I'd imagine myself swinging back and forth before going to sleep - more fun than counting sheep! (Always worked, fell asleep quickly.) Wonderful concept - beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteLana, that is a great idea for relaxing to the point of slumber. I must share that with the grand kids at an opportune time.
DeleteThanks bunches for coming to call. I love that you did. :)
Such a sad little world for a lonely little girl.
ReplyDeleteA part of it was, Barb. No doubt about it. But, I think, when it is all said and done, the good times will outweigh the bad.
DeleteI love the simplicity and the depth of this poem, Michael. In some sense we're all in our little worlds waiting for someone to recognize what we need! The girl in the swing will stay with me through today.
ReplyDeleteYours is a wonderful, positive overview, Corinne, but isn't that just like you to see? I appreciate that about you... And, I have no doubts, the girl in the swing will stay with me for all my days. I sure hope so. :)
DeleteNice write, my friend. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, Canela.
DeleteYou mentioned coulee and I thought of our friend in Medicine Hat... Such a lovely poem, brings memories of growing up. -Dave Raider
ReplyDeleteNice to know we are on the same wave length, Dave. It is a good path to follow. Glad this resonates with you, Sir.
DeleteTouches my heart as I read.
ReplyDeleteVery kind of you to say, Barbi-Kay. Thanks!
DeleteSadly, the cynic in me was the first to read, so I was waiting, or rather expecting, something more than the telling. Her adviser, her intent, no one the wiser ... and then the man who wanted to sell ... which says much about me - expecting something sinister. Even though I am very much aware of it (Do you remember my poem 'Disease'?) , I can't seem to help it.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I just bought a home (well, about a year now) and having to struggle through the whole ordeal - the shady feelings, the obvious lies and those that do not readily present themselves - The largest purchase you will every make and one that you have no real control over. You have to trust and hope that all parties will be honorable (your realtor, the bank, the seller) - perhaps this colored my perceptions a bit - striking a nerve, so to speak.
Upon my second reading, with a more receptive mind, I see thoughts and observations, mirrored. The passage of time - The world is constantly changing, and we cannot help but be changed ourselves - whatever those changes might be. We all see our surroundings differently, which makes us feel alone and as if we are the only REAL people in the scene around around us. Day players to our saga.
I am still amazed and in awe, when I am surprised. Unlike 'normal' people, I am truly elated when I am proven wrong. I think you know what I mean.
So here is to the ever changing world in which we live in (wink)
Oh, and nicely done my friend ... for proving me wrong :o)
xox
Home buying and building are traumatic experiences, for sure. I was fortunate in both cases, to have people I trusted, handling all my affairs... For me, the end all frustrations have come with automobiles... Not nearly as big an expenditure, but still, one that can linger.
DeleteThanks for all you said here, Shauna. I tell you, I could hear your voice in every word. And, I have to say, congratulations on your new house. :)
Thanks hon - it's a work in progress ;0)
DeleteLovely. It brought me back to my own swinging days.
ReplyDeleteI bet those were the best of times, Kathy.
DeleteThanks so much for visiting. You made my day.
Interesting how this poem swayed in a way I didn't expect to at all! ;) Well written: enjoyed reading the journey of the swing. :) <3
ReplyDeleteThank you, Elly. You have made my day, you have.
DeleteLovely from beginning to end. It has that homey feeling of sharing and caring. Beautifully written from start to finish. XXX
ReplyDelete--Leta
That is really good to know, Leta... I never wanted to lose the feel of it taking place in a neighborhood typical... This was is as North American as apple pie.
DeleteThanks so much for taking time to read and share your thoughts.
This poem reminds me of the time I sat on the floor at my bedroom window, and blew bubbles out into the cherry blossom snow. I know you have heard this story. I never did understand how people waling by never looked up to see where they were coming from. Your poem made me a little sad and very happy at the same time!
ReplyDeleteYour story often comes to mind, at bubble blowing time, with the grands. I know I am doing it right when the bubbles smile back at me.
Deletetoo bad I cannot edit my typos! lol
ReplyDeleteHey, just a part of the process. My biggest concern is an auto correct moment that I overlook, but everyone else witnesses.
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