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A Work In Progress (Sonnet for Charlotte)
I think I like someone. What should I do?
Agnizing, her bearing has caught off guard.
Pause, reflect... enough data to review;
A simple survey... why make this so hard?
First steps are subtle, to shared envisions,
Endowing part of a sudden, not all...
How does one weigh in random provisions,
When sample sizes, in hand, are so small?
Knowing, emotion is driving this team,
Running rampant from cause to consequence;
If my first impressions are as they seem,
Nothing more is required here, to convince.
Count me, all in; nothing more to address;
She is far more than a work in progress.
Michael Todd (2013)
NOTE: I got the idea for this poem from Charlotte Blackwell.
You can find her here... http://charlotteblackwell.blogspot.com/
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guess I'm first Mikey - happened to think to see what you up to --notifications take a while . I like it - you express the emotion well - but of course you do lol
ReplyDeleteHello, Sweet Sue! Glad you like this. No emotional roller coaster this time, as it was all good...
DeleteOh, and... Nice FRISTING !!!
I adore the close to this. loved it .. thank you Mike!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Katherine... You know I love closure.
DeleteWell done! Rhythm is spot on!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Trish... Iambic Pentameter was my friend. :)
DeleteSo true if first impressions are spot on what more convincing do you need. Thanks for the invite Myke this was very enjoyable. Laura
ReplyDeleteThank you for coming, Laura, and for finding a way in when conventional means would not cooperate. Glad you enjoyed our poem this week.
DeleteThis is lovely, both in form and content. Everyone is a work in progress and, as Ellie Goulding sings, anything could happen :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lisa... I am a work in progress, which is a good thing, yes?
DeleteWell done, Myke. We often write to work out that life work in progress that's going on. It reflects what was going on at any given time. -slj
ReplyDeleteSort of like diary entries, Stephen? ... I like that analogy!
DeleteThanks for the visit. Hope you had a fantastic birthday.
We are all works in progress, aren't we? This was lovely, Myke. :)
ReplyDeleteYes, we are... and good things are bound to happen. I just know it. :)
DeleteFor some reason my comment didn't post, so I'll try again...Interesting take. Personally, I never think about how I feel about someone...it's always gut reaction with my heart right there on my sleeve. Nice piece, Myke.
ReplyDeleteFirst impressions are always telling, Sandra. Thanks for reading and being so persevering, too!
DeleteFirst impressions are usually quite accurate, and pave the way for a deeper connection. I agree we are all works in progress, no matter our age, we just keep on changing and improving with time. (Like a fine wine...) Love it!
ReplyDeleteThe depth of your observations tend to motivate me to delve deeper, Colleen. This is a great example of my mindset, whey you are in the room. And, for the record, my first impression of you was really good.
DeleteThat's so sweet! A very sweet Sonnet :)
ReplyDeleteSweet is what we shoot for. :)
DeleteOops! That was me ... Leta :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Leta...
DeleteFabulous Sonnet, Charlotte is an inspirational force... And I think we are all works in progress, -David II
ReplyDeleteThanks, Dave. Glad you like the poem...
DeleteAnd what you say about Charlotte being an inspirational force... Absolutely!
I can't even explain how honored I'm am. This actually brought me to tears. I think we are all a work in progress and need to continue to work on makin g this world a better place. Hugs
ReplyDeleteYou have summed up my thoughts and feelings perfectly, Charlotte, as to what I was thinking as I was writing... and, hey, without you, this poem never happens, so I thank you from the bottom of my heart for the inspiration.
DeleteSo many excellent, thought provoking lines in this well thought out poem! I would say that your work is done!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Dave. This was one that when I was done, there was nothing left to do, as far as modification. Don't you just love when drafts are as finals?
DeleteI think you had your mind made up from the first line!
ReplyDeleteYou are most correct, Seb. All I had to do was figure out how to put the train in motion over the next thirteen. :)
DeleteSmall samples can be quite convincing, Sir Myke. You never really know what's behind them, but you'll find out slowly, step by step, and see where it leads to. I guess connections are a work in progress too...?
ReplyDeleteGreat things come from humble beginnings, Sir Ruggi, and from there, many good things can happen. Thanks for the visit.
DeleteAction versus outcome, without the first, the second does not exist. Effort worth expelling! Lovely piece..hand holding and all!
ReplyDeleteSome might say that holding hands is a lost art, Stephy. I see it as the ultimate connection. Thanks for coming by.
DeleteA leap of faith even if you fall on your face is worth the time...great write!!
ReplyDeleteAny leap of faith is a bridge to fate, Barbara, and one worth taking.
DeleteThanks so much for visiting.
Another wonderful poem. Always love the sonnet format. =)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Elaine... Sonnets are my comfort zone sometimes, other times they just confound me.
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