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Riffing with Lainey
Love is like a Beatles Song....
Perhaps all our ideas of love, start from books
Grow from sappy songs that spark fanciful dreams and ideals
I always imagined that attraction came within piercing looks:
Knights on white horses falling head over heels.
And while those daydreams haven't all come true,
There is one thing, one belief, in which my fantasies
Have been proven, one thing that I would swear to,
The reality of heart, one truth in which everyone agrees.
And that is; true love will burn in you like fire,
Will keep you warm, make you comforted, and protected.
Your world will turn empty and cold should it expire...
Biting again, and again every time your heart is rejected.
Because love consumes your mind, your heart, your soul-
But then in doing so, it makes you whole.
All you need is love~
written by : Elaine
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Spinning
A carousel horse can't change his course, doesn't see the need;
He is going to hell in a hand basket (just a figure of speech).
This breed fails to see the need, spiraling, in locked speed;
Consider, perhaps there comes a moment to teach, avoid impeach?
I am unabbreviated etcetera, in as much, the ultimate so and so,
Noting in my way, there is nothing on display, to break my fall.
Consequence: turbulence; cast fate to whims of change in escrow
Over the top and smash it up, or hit the brakes: a margin call?
All the things you said: At face value folly, appearing distant;
What makes me so quick to fend off with logorrhea and dissent?
I can't say, or I won't, but I know: Your voice is a constant.
Should be obvious by now, truth lies in your advice and consent.
My intricate flaws, as you deduce, reduced to a simple design:
Guage Northern lights to southern stars and please, toss me a lifeline.
All I need is you~
Myke
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Disclaimer: For anyone not familiar with the term "Riffing," that is what we call responding to a poem with another poem. I have done this often, over the years with Elaine aka Lainey, who is not only my bestie, but my favorite writer in the realm. Getting to share her poem here, is a high point for me.
Fantastic poetry here! Lainey's description of love, so apt, so filled with what love should be. With the final line "All you need is love" ...Yes!
ReplyDeleteand then Myke's answering poem it caused me to imagine spinning, spiraling with the effects of love. With the final line " All I need is you" so powerful!
Love this as I love the both of you!
Thanks, Dave... As is evidenced, my contradicting Lainey is an exercise in futility. Here, as always, I quickly come to my senses... I very much appreciate your generous overview afforded here, Sir.
DeleteOh, and of course... Nice FRISTING !!!
Love both poems!
ReplyDeleteIrene
Thanks, Irene!
DeleteJust absolutely beautiful is this both pieces love how the one end wit the other total package be .. Yeah .. LOL .. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bettie.
DeleteI so loved reading this one, so glad Dave shared and I git to see it, love this, bravo to both of you!
ReplyDeleteVery glad you enjoyed these, Lucy.
DeleteI love the way the two sonnets interact with two different views of love and life...
ReplyDeleteone showing that love affects us all in every way .. A Woman
the other showing that life's practicalities always gets its way.... A MAN
is this way man and woman never quite see eye to eye over such matters?..
Your wordage is brilliant, it has pace and description that makes you want to read on and on...
I am envious Elaine and Myke... that you have found each other and shearing such an idyllic relationship within this sea of words... loved it.. :-) xxx Trev ...
For the record, Trev... Lainey taught me all about sonnets, among many other things regarding writing poetry. She is pretty amazing.
DeleteI’ve subscribed!
ReplyDeletealways good to see Lainey and the two poems compliment each other.I can see your huge smile Myke :D
Glad we got all that technical stuff worked out, Sue.
DeleteThanks for stopping by.
You two crazy kids :) -slj *tips hat *
ReplyDeleteThanks, Stephen... That really is a nice hat, Sir.
DeleteI'm glad you explained riffing....I didn't realize that I've done it on a few occasions. This exchange was interesting! Nice work, Myke and Lainey
ReplyDeleteActually, Sandra... I believe you and I shared a round of riffing, within the past year. Isn't it fun?
DeleteThanks so much for the visit. :)
I had forgotten that we'd riffed before Myspazz screwed up! I just got notified that I could get my blogs, by the way, and I have downloaded them to my computer. It'll take time, but I'm separating the poems and putting them on a thumbdrive.
DeleteI secured mine, as well. There are over a thousand of them, and I just don't have the time or inclination to play with them right now. But, sometime, when I least expect, the notion will strike me and I will dive in.
DeleteYou two speak in perfect harmony. I'd say lovely, but it would be redundant in this case! Fabulous. -David II
ReplyDeleteNothing redundant at all, about harmony, David. Once it is in place, it is a powerful thing.
DeleteFunny you should mention harmony, as the song "Harmony" appeared on Elton John's "Goodbye Yellow Brick Road" album, which was released 40 years ago, this month. That Autumn was a very special time for me, both in obvious ways, and things to come later in life, that would change the very fiber of my being... I even saw Elton for the first time, in concert then. He performed several of the seventeen tracks from the then new album.
It appears I have gotten off track and into a ramble. Sorry about that, David. Truth be told, I am having an awful time holding my focus. I seem to keep tripping over intangibles.
Awww, I've missed Lainey and her poems so much. And I love your riffing response, especially that last line about the Northern Lights and southern stars. Beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteI miss her, too, Lisa... You know, I struggled through that entire poem, writing past one obstacle, then another... just to get to that line you mention... you know, the heart of the matter... Thanks so much for stopping by.
DeleteWow, wow and WOW!!!! I am totally blown away by both sonnets. They are each exquisite in their own designs, and reminiscent of the Beatles lyrics. I love the additional line at the end.... it puts your Lainey and Myke stamp on each one and demonstrates the bond between you. Love this and love you both! <3
ReplyDeleteI love what you say about stamping and bonding, Colleen. These are very important things. The older I get, the more I come to realize this, and cherish it, for all it is worth, which is a lot, as in infinite a lot.
DeleteThanks for your very insightful observations. They were most welcome.
I am speechless! I have read both twice and wow. I love these lines from Lainey's write.
ReplyDeleteThe reality of heart, one truth in which everyone agrees.
And that is; true love will burn in you like fire,
Will keep you warm, make you comforted, and protected.
Your world will turn empty and cold should it expire...
Biting again, and again every time your heart is rejected
So true, she has nailed it on the head!!!
And yours
All the things you said: At face value folly, appearing distant;
What makes me so quick to fend off with logorrhea and dissent?
I can't say, or I won't, but I know: Your voice is a constant.
Should be obvious by now, truth lies in your advice and consent
So much said right there!! *shaking head* still have me speechless..lol
The pressure of being on the same page as her... well, it can be suffocating. However, when writing with her, she can motivate me in ways I cannot find on my own. Don't know if I said that right, but suffice it to say, she makes me better... sometimes better than I really am...
DeleteThanks so much for spending time with this, Laura.